In A Year Down Yonder, Richard Peck does an amazing job of showing the setting to the reader!!!
For example...
We had a stretch of perfect weather, here in the healthiest climate in Illinois. Little red bushes showed down in Grandma's strawberry plants. The hollyhocks were every color. Trees leafed out overnight, and the streets were like tunnels with bright countryside at either end. One magic morning the whole town was scented with lilac.
Let's experiment with showing the setting to the reader!
Little droplets of water misted my face, cooling my red hot cheeks as I stormed off the muddy soccer field.
ReplyDeleteGolden sunlight streamed through my thin, white curtains.
ReplyDeleteThe cool California wind whipped at my face as I stepped outside.
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ReplyDeleteZoe, I LOVE your alliteration...cool California!!!
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The Wet, Blue water fell like a tear ran down my face
ReplyDeleteThe wind struck my face like lightnig struk a tree
ReplyDeleteThe wet, wednesday smells from outside made me feel in Nevis.
ReplyDeleteIn my book Trapped I put.... I had to bundle up because it was 50° outside in New York City!! Please read my book:):):):):)!!!
ReplyDeletethe wind whipped across my face as I got ready to shoot.
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